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Winners of the Write and Revise Contest

Journal Entry: Thu Dec 27, 2012, 7:33 AM

Part One


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2. Story Me ThisThe line of worn travelers straggled from the brightness of the barren gray rock valley into the cave mouth, all carrying bags of various sizes and too weary to talk much. The light of the sun was moderated here in the cave due to the angle of the overhang, so they could remove shaded goggles and blink tired eyes, but only a few had the motivation to do so. At the head of the group, their guide folded his map and looked askance at the etched markings on the cave wall, none of which held any meaning for him.
"How much longer?" asked the woman behind him, unslinging her bag so she could roll her neck. "Our elders will need to stop." The pretty woman in tattered brown and gray layers had recently reached her twentieth year. Her husband was two years older, both of them stoop-shouldered with advancing age. The three weeks of travel had not been easy on any of the travelers, but it had taken a toll on the elders especially, some of whom were even as old as thirty, and the guide's wife had t

Part Two

1: Self-DiscoveryAs a young man, out back where the trail curls around
to meet the creek, where you can still smell the ghost
of a three-year-old fire - he used to think of novels;
pieces of charcoal we hold as holy, hoping a pen can
put the grit of cinders back into our mouths.
The last chapter seemed to him smaller and further
away, and the goalposts so thin, and the grey plot so dim.
By thinking of things, you could understand them.
The way small animal tracks leave mud holes where smaller
spiders spun overnight webs, delicate, complex, stunning.
By morning the threads are strung with tiny blue water
beads, dewy pearls on finest silk as if dropped from the
neck of a tipsy wood sprite still dancing as she tiptoes
on home.
But the spider needs not understand why, to comply.
And so creation needs a habitat, long-silhouettes, and
tall shoes for getting wet, and a courageous set of legs
for soiling and navigation - to feel the way of walking
is a wordless lesson -
the feeling of light falling on strange


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3: Something Very Special (Revised)Something Very Special
He looked at me with na´ve blue eyes. Clear oceans of curiosity that stared up at me. Just like my own. Whenever he did this, he would always make the same request. A simple request, for a story he cherished. A story he loved, that was just as bitter-sweet to tell as it was to hear.
The story told of a prince from a far away place, from a time before either he or I were born. Even still, it was not a tale of a world that was young. Even in the prince's lifetime it was ancient. An old world filled with old songs. Its own melody was one of the few things to outlast it.
Even with all else silent, that song lived on.
It was just another fairy tale though. When I was his age, my mother and father used to tell me the same story. Throughout all my youth, I cherished it. It was precious to me. The beautiful but bitter story of a fallen prince of a lost kingdom.
It was supposed to be just another fairy tale.
Then one day. I met the prince himself.

Thank you to everyone who entered. Prizes will be delivered shortly.

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AnImperfectDream Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Did not see that coming. The more I reread the piece, the less of a chance I thought it had of winning anything. D:

Glad I was wrong. :heart:
HugQueen Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012   Writer
RiseandBe Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations, everyone! Well deserved wins. =D
spoems Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012   Writer
ShadowedAcolyte Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
Congrats to all winners! Thank you very much for hosting the contest, DLD, and to all who judged or in other ways assisted.
DamonWakes Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Student Writer
I loved this contest idea, and it looks like people got a lot out of it. :clap: Congratulations to the winners.

Might I suggest adding their names beside the entries, though? These thumbnails don't offer any way of seeing who the piece was by at a glance. Well, not unless you recognise the tag, at least.
spoems Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012   Writer
Good idea. I'll see about getting it edited.
SedahLiah Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012   Writer
A tremendous thanks to all involved. :)
DrippingWords Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my gosh, thank you so much! :huggle: Congrats to all the other winners!
curlscat Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Student Writer
Oh well, I didn't get it in in time. :(

Still, congratulations to the winners!
rlkirkland Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations Winners! :party:
A wothy exercise for all who took part;
thanks to those who judged and hosted this event!:heart::heart:
AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats! :D
Carmalain7 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012
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